Tuesday, May 11, 2010

Dogs poem

Dogs

Trained to be pets,
Couch takers,
Frisbee chasers,
Walk lovers,
Dogs.

Daytime sleepers,
Scrap beggers,
Face lickers,
Tail chasers,
Man's best friend,
Dogs.

I'll take any feedback on this.

4 comments:

  1. I think it is a good poem. I don't see any mistakes, but the phrase "couch takers" doesn't really sound right in the poem. Is there anothe way to say the phrase?

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  2. This is a really good poem. I love dogs, and I really like this poem. Maybe you could use "spot warmer" in place of what Jensen said.

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  3. Ya thats a good idea. My dog can be like a replacement for a blanket.

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  4. I think it might depend on if you want the "couch taker" to be good or bad. I love the "spot warmer" but I'm thinking of a dog who jumps on the couch right when you wanted to sit there. I love this poem, though--the two word lines are really descriptive and cool. Makes me want a dog!

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