Tethered on an 18 foot rope,
Aleksey Leonov floats in space.
Traveling 17,400 miles per hour,
Over looking the Pacific Ocean.
He is being shown on TV all over the world.
But the ten minutes go by too fast,
Making him hastily get back to the airlock.
But he can't find his hands or feet,
His suit has bloated from the pressure change.
If he does not get in soon his life support system will fail.
He dives headfirst into the airlock,
Then does a flip to face the door and close it.
He is safe now,
And pressurized air pumps into the airlock.
Does anyone have suggestions on how to make this better or see any mistakes?
I think that it's good and really sets a good scene. You make it clear and easy to picture him in space, and overall I think it's fine as it is.
ReplyDeleteI agree with Hunter. It is really good, and has good detail
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